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Sprite 2: I Think I'm A Clone Now (Part 2) by Amethyst

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13 May 2025 00:09 #4292 by DanZilla
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13 May 2025 03:12 #4294 by Dreamer
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13 May 2025 03:36 #4295 by mhalpern
a tiny missed opportunity with the shrink devise, putting normal chocolate in it as the test. because Wonka.

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13 May 2025 04:53 - 13 May 2025 04:59 #4296 by Amethyst

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Thanks for your comments, Dreamer. As usual it's a joy to see your take on things. So here's my comments to your comments :)

Vanessa, you need an emergency appointment with your counselor immediately. You learned some new things about your situation that should qualify as needing to see your counselor immediately. Yes, won't be a human mutant, biologically, but you still have the mind of one. If you give up on life, then Blythe and her mother win.

The suicide attempt failed, and you were told you are very durable. Face down in a puddle and hoping to drown, only to be found by the Imp. 7.5 for the dive, Imp, you need to get Vanessa to Doyle so they can get her to her counselor. You slipped. I hope Imp doesn't buy that. Gargoyle reserved for brooding at nine-thirty, Imp, never change. An invitation to join Imp's art class, take it! Swan, there are worse nicknames to be given by the Imp.

Yes, Sprite really should talk to her counsellor, or anyone really, but she doesn't for a lot of reasons, mostly because she had trouble opening up to others and fears that they'll see her as the monster she sees herself as. I was originally going to have another student see her fall, but after I showed the others the sarcastic, "We do have a pool" line Morph said it sounded like something the Imp would say. I thought that the Imp would be a good person to talk to her and the scene evolved from there, plus it was fun writing a bit with the Imp in it.

Thank you, Vanessa, for being Polly's friend. I knew she was a nice girl, returns what she takes if she can remember where she took it from. Yes, this is how friendships start, Vanessa, just you wait. Using each other, naw, friends help each other. Eep, big hug. Vanessa, you made a mistake out of fear of what your parents would do or say to Blythe. Stop beating yourself up about it, please.

Yeah, Sprite is a lot better person than she's willing to give herself credit for and when I came up with Pack Rat, I thought they would make good friends since they have some things in common and the situation with her not being trusted due to her kleptomania, it gave her someone to sympathize with. She's just trying to fool herself by saying they're using each other.

Boy, that is a lot of good advice for Vanessa from Helsing. A piercing or cutting weapon her size, yikes! I hope the staff keeps Huntsman from harming Vanessa. Information from Helsing on fairies, good idea. Ack! All that history and origin of the words, information overload. An email on it later, close one. Darn spirit giving her a library of knowledge in her head can be more than a pain at times.

University-level thesis paper, darn you, spirit in Helsing for overdoing it.

I worked with Domo a lot on that scene, trying to get Helsing right and what kind of info she'd provide. I wanted to show the effect of her spirit properly and he was a huge help.

Oh lord, I knew Vanessa's birth father was bad, but not that bad. Forced to give up music and try out for the football team, why do they think that is manly? Kiera, aka Lightwing, I wonder where in the South she is from; I can't place the accent. Ooo, the use of test subject has Vanessa freaking out, Kiera quickly apologizes.

Yeah, Vanessa's parents are really detestable, especially her father.

Ouch, at Whateley due to an incident with H1 when she first manifested her wings of light. Liberty, Mississippi, no wonder she had to come to Whateley, news in a small Southern town travels faster than gossip in a high school. Baseline humans and non-Sidhe, non-Exemplar mutants have a slight side effect from the potion; no wonder it is still in the testing phase. Rapid hair growth in unwanted places, eep.

Lightwing and Suave are an interesting couple. When we decided to show the salon and reveal that there were class options in later years for kids who don't want to or aren't suited to being a cape or villain, Domo suggested that Suave lean into the whole gay hairdresser thing and have a girlfriend but have a girlfriend and the two of them were fun to write.

No trim for the antennae needed, but they are now fully blue. Good, no side effects, hair growth only where it is wanted. Suave, don't offer a pixie cut to someone stuck as a fairy. Yikes, the threat Vanessa gives, she definitely learned from the Tink videos. Boy, all his practice on those dolls paid off. Suave did an excellent job on Vanessa's haircut.

Yup, so no more seeing Blythe in the mirror.. hopefully. And Vanessa's go to reaction when she feels awkward or threatened is usually snark, so it made sense for her to make a comeback, and given what she learned watching Tink, it made sense to include that threat.

Ah, the school store, that place is huge, and I bet she hasn't seen the basement area yet. Ouch, need for so much and only so much cash to spend. If not for Becky helping her with the shopping, I don't want to think about her carrying it all back to their dorm room. That is a lot of stuff, I hope she has enough money for all of it. Smart ideas to stretch things out where she can. Oh, good, the refund on the airfare is coming in very handy. Hehe, Lab Rat has an aesthetic for his devises.

A stressful week, Vanessa needs some time alone to decompress. Powers testing on Monday. Fairy DNA, Exemplar 2, PK 3, Wizard 3, pretty potent combination. Rats, she still has hobgoblin problems. And they are ones tailor-made to taunt her, that has never happened with hobgoblins before from any of the other characters.

Great, now the MCO will know she can sense air displacement. As if I couldn't hate Vanessa's bio-dad any more, he pulls this. More tests at Doyle, ack. By Friday, she is officially a mutant Fairy. Weekly session with Dr. Bellows on Saturday, and he wished to talk with her about how being a Fairy makes her feel. You opened up to him, even if it was with snark, that is still a win for Bellows.

Huntsman! He is attempting to murder a fellow student. Why hasn't he been locked up in a cell and warned that further such actions on his part could result in his expulsion and being handed over to the MCO for attempted murder? Ouch, she wants to have a relationship, but can't due to her size.


Yep, Vanessa really does need time to destress after that week. I'd never seen hobgoblins used that way in the other stories and I thought it would be interesting for Sprite, it's a subconscious thing she's doing, letting her guilt and fears overcome her, and she's unintentionally baring her soul to Becky, or in this case the testers, whenever it happens.
Her concerns about the MCO there, just made sense to me, especially with her father riling them up at home. Bellows got a win there and it's one of the first signs that her defenses are starting to fall.
Yeah, Huntsman is an ass and he's probably not going to give up, He probably should be charged with something, but she can't really prove anything since she was unharmed and there were no witnesses. And yes, she wants to be normal, and that includes relationships. She never really realized that part until now and so the reality hit her pretty hard.

Oh no, so depressed she doesn't want to eat, yet goes to eat lunch, but thinks she isn't hungry, this is very bad. Noooo! Not the devisor chocolate, please don't let it give her bigger breasts, that would make her more depressed. Good, you know the sarcasm was uncalled for and are trying to apologize in your own way.

Flying to leave the Crystal Hall and smacks right into someone with the same look on their face as she has. It is the guy she met on her first day at school who helped get her stuff to her dorm room. Shannon, why is he more serious than Vanessa? What has happened to him in the weeks since we last saw him? Dang, Vanessa sure knows how to condense everything that has happened to her down. Aww, a nice gesture to share the chocolate bar with Shannon. But this is the first step in Shannon becoming a girl, if I recall correctly.

3/4 to Shannon and the rest for Vanessa, oh boy. Cheered up after snacking on it after dinner, this is going to cause trouble. Snacking on it that much over the next couple of days, uh oh. Breasts getting sore and tender, meep. She thinks it is a growth spurt, if she only knew. By Monday night, they are up at least a cup size, a C cup.

Sprite alternates between depression and snark, not surprising in her situation and the chocolate situation sort of lended itself to being something that she would try to use to drowning her sorrows. It becomes a vicious cycle that bites her in the ass, and yeah, fuels more depression and snark. As for Shannon, Fiddler and I have had plans for the two of them to have this odd sort of friendship almost since the beginning and have their stories overlap some. This is just the start, Team Zero will soon be upon us :D

Ouch, even more growth and finds out others had it happen as well. Even Polly and Grande got hit. Just how many students ate that chocolate? Ouch, BMA in poor-fitting undergarments. The announcement about the breast growth, but to go about their day 'normally' and they would be kept up to date. As if that would keep some teens from panicking. *facepalms* Not that pun. And chocolate to cheer herself up, arrggh.

Yep, a lot of girls got hit, but surprisingly few wanted a cure lol. Sprite's snark strikes again, and when possible, her wit often includes puns as we see later.

You are all underage, they wouldn't ask that, Vanessa. Great, the medical staff's concern about possible complications, so still no idea that the devisor chocolate is to blame. Is Emiko's boyfriend an Ultraviolent? The bras are temporary until they can figure out the cause and a cure, don't call the people trying to fix the issues assholes. The snark is strong with these two. Ugh, I can't believe she made a boob fairy joke.

The porno comment is just Vanessa being Vanessa. Yup, Red is an Ultraviolent. Shannon and Vanessa are both very bitter and untrusting, so they're going to mistrust most authority figures by default and use snark as a defense. You can blame Fiddler for the boob fairy joke, he joked about it and I ran with it.

Welp, the answer to the issue arrives, and now all the victims have to be examined and tested to figure out a way to fix the problem. Dr. Gutierrez, they must be working all the Doyle staff overtime right now. Oh boy, the cure is a Devisor drug, and her body's DNA is booby trapped so it might trigger it. Welp, I guess she is stuck with larger breasts since she won't take the antidote.

Yeah, there is no way Sprite feels safe taking any devisor drugs with her condition and it's a sensible precaution in her situation, so she'll have to get used to her new cup size.

Ouch, from B cups to D cup permanently. Polly is happy with her growth and tries to cheer up Vanessa along with Peter and Becky. But she spends her free time with Shannon. Yup, I remembered right, Shannon is going through female puberty.

Magic lessons with Becky, and went with her to buy supplies for spell slips. Another excursion to Dunwich on Saturday to Mrs. Rogers' Boutique. On the fly spells without runes or spell slips, oh no. Gah! These hobgoblins, that is just cruel for her own subconscious to conjure up those and torment Vanessa like this.

Oh boy, she passed out, poked awake by Becky who is concerned about her and needs to know whatever issue is hampering her ability to use magic to such an extreme degree. Yes, tell Becky, you can trust her. You aren't a monster and you deserve friends. One mistake, no matter how big, or unintended the consequences, should ruin your life or ability to have or make friends.

Finally! She tells everything, including how she had the best of intentions when she betrayed Blythe, Aiden was trying to protect her from his crap parents. Boy, she let everyting come out, even the fact she is a Fairy mutant now. I'm tearing up with Vanessa.

Yes, Shannon and Sprite both get to suffer, but it will bring them closer together.
You have no idea how hard it was coming up with different hobgoblin situations to poke at poor Vanessa's ego. Suffocated by giant breasts, well, if you're gonna pass out it's not a bad way to go. It was a long time coming, but I wanted Becky to be the first person she honestly confided in. She sort of did with Shannon but she was trying to make light of it, and this was much more heartfelt and a big step for her. I shed a few tears writing this scene as well.

A trip to Roger's Boutique, the clothes from there are like nothing you have ever worn. Marie put money into her account to cover the cost of clothes, thank you, new mom. Girls with GSD calender for Venus Inc. That pays a lot, you may not like being a girl, but use it to your advantage for stuff like this. I wonder what kind fo restaurants they have in Dunwich? Elemental Dance Club, I can't wait to see their act.

Marie, Leanna, and Danielle, I wonder if they will all come on Parents Day to visit. Rats, can't play musically instruments for others because shrunken ones normal-sized people wouldn't be able to hear.

About time she got some new clothes. And yes, Marie is a great adoptive parent for Vanessa. Working with Venus Inc. was a necessary evil in Vanessa's eyes. A little bit of embarassment but she'll get paid decently for it and she figured that she would need the money for clothes and the benefits that were offered. Hopefully, Becky can work out an instrument for her, but we'll be showing more of the Elemental Dance Club in the Winter term.

Darn, a collection of rags, at first I hoped Shannon's costume was of Ragman from DC. But he is just a hobo from the sounds of it. Vanessa, never shrink down medicine and use it, it might be smaller, but the amount in it is still the same and could easily overdose you several times over. Oof, Shannon brooding since the chocolate incident.

Yeah, Shannon is in a dark place, and we'll see more of his side of things in Fiddler's next story.

Vanessa, start listening to them more! You aren't all asshole, or you wouldn't care about becoming friends with others and potentially hurting or betraying them.

*facepalm* You are worth the effort, it is getting that through to you that is like talking to a rock right now. Polly and Peter would help you anyways, they are good people. As for Shannon, you had no way of knowing what the chocolate would do so don't you dare blame yourself for even a part of what he is going through. Bwahaha, pushes Shannon to get out and have some fun, but doing it to see how really damaged you are. Stop lying to yourself and realize you are a good person who went about a situation the wrong way due to fear.

The pirate fairy from the Tinkerbell movie and Vanessa feels empty inside, crud. Ack! So that is why Vanessa took the Venus Inc. GSD calender job. Tink size, an extreme rarity for students to have, but best to keep it around just in case. Oh no, forcing Shannon to the drama department to get a new costume. Just admit it, you are enjoying this more than you realize, Vanessa.

Vanessa has a thick skull for someone so small. And she's harder on herself than anyone else would ever be. She's trying to be a good person, but not willing to give herself the credit for it. Yup, the GSD calendar job came with benefits. Yes, she is enjoying herself a little, even if she won't admit it, but she feels like she can relax and there's no pressure to be anyone but herself with Shannon.

Vanessa, you have the sense of humor of a dad sometimes. All that from 'reading between the lines'. I wonder if that is what Shannon really means.

Yes, she does. And she's paraphrasing what she thinks he's thinking and probably more accurate than she thinks.
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13 May 2025 04:56 #4297 by Amethyst

a tiny missed opportunity with the shrink devise, putting normal chocolate in it as the test. because Wonka.

lol yeah, that was a missed opportunity, but canonically, why would she want to shrink chocolate? *gasp*

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13 May 2025 10:33 #4298 by mhalpern

a tiny missed opportunity with the shrink devise, putting normal chocolate in it as the test. because Wonka.

lol yeah, that was a missed opportunity, but canonically, why would she want to shrink chocolate? *gasp*

To test to see if there's any material loss, or if it just makes everything denser

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