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Jailhouse Lock (Part 1) by MaLAguA

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16 Dec 2025 01:04 #4587 by DanZilla
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Jailhouse Lock (Part 1)
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18 Dec 2025 01:50 #4588 by Dreamer
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18 Dec 2025 04:01 #4589 by MaLAguA
Thank you so much for the comments Dreamer!

I chose the sort of flashback intro to the characters that would be the targets because it felt interesting at the time. I hope it didn't feel confusing.

A small detail that i think it was clarified later was that Luther was a member of a group that purchased the Syndicate services.

And yeah, Laureate is annoying. In context, normally he doesn't really care much about the sponsored kids, but now he's just suddenly wary about Vic's condition, seeing his GSD as another expense, clearly wanting a baseline looking individual to blend in with the crowd without any enchantment. He is clearly doing it to get under Caroline's skin going after Vic to get to her but is not being overt enough on the matter. She knew that bringing up the board members over the GSD matter wouldn't turn out in his favor since, if recalled from New year escapades, most of them have a form of GSD.

And yeah. this is a Raffina/Lifeward story. Well, them and another POV character.

I also use stories to set up future plotlines, wonder if anyone picks up on those.
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