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11 Jun 2022 00:18 - 11 Jun 2022 04:16 #1906 by Wasamon
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Folks on the Discord probably recall that I've got various projects in progress with the intent to query or self-publish.  But before they get to that point, I really could use new eyes on them to point out when and where I'm getting things wrong.

Not so much punctuation, spelling, or grammar (though if I get too fancy with the weird little side-rules, call me out on it), but in general when things don't work for you or you think they could be done better.

I'm not sure how many items I'll link in from Drive, but this will be the main thread for any commentary on many different items in the future, most likely.

--- The Stories ---

Mer Manoa, Book 1 docs.google.com/document/d/1RYT79IAehrnU...7&rtpof=true&sd=true
(entry title undecided as yet)
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11 Jun 2022 00:25 #1907 by Wasamon
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For reference, Mer Manoa is a mermaid-centric story that I originally started circa 2010, worked slowly through to its fourth canto, then put on hiatus for most of a decade.

I started it up again three MerMays ago, writing the fifth and sixth cantos, but I wasn't happy with the state of the first three since they were, all together, shorter than Canto V.

So this year I went back and rewrote the entire first book (three cantos) of the story. The word count went from just over 50k to currently 72k.

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11 Jun 2022 06:14 #1912 by Sir Lee
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I have a slight interest on mermaid stories, so I might have a stab at it. Don't hold your breath (pun unintended) for a quick turnaround, though.
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12 Jun 2022 06:55 #1917 by Wasamon
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Any time you can, later or sooner, is no problem :)

I wouldn't be doing anything with this particular series until I have the latter half close to completion, and that's... probably another 250,000 words down the line.

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12 Jun 2022 16:27 - 12 Jun 2022 16:41 #1919 by Maladyusted
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Hmm, so should the link be Whoever has the Link can comment? Because I can only look right now...

OR do we Request Access?

The last pair are soon to be connected.
They are soon to be met.

"to be met" sounds weird? Like, obviously you mean they're gonna meet each other, but it sounds like a third party is meeting them. The Weaver? If so, this is the first indication that she's gonna be an actor, not an observer.

It's weird, but is it *too* weird? Hmm... Oh, it could be the audience who will meet them soon! That'd be cool use of words!
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13 Jun 2022 09:30 #1921 by Wasamon
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The starting canticles shade weirder on the grammar than most of the narrative, lol. But there are definitely some odd turns of phrase that I enjoyed too much here.

Also the fun and games of removing every single foot-related noun, verb, adjective, and phrase... Weird vocabulary choices abound.

Also, I got tired of managing the link privileges again, lol. It's easier to manage notes in a single thread than scrolling through almost 300 pages of text.

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