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Light And Shadow Discussion
11 Oct 2021 03:26 #638
by Erisian
Light And Shadow Discussion was created by Erisian
By request, here's a place to discuss Light and Shadow - or any of the previous books in the series for that matter.
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13 Oct 2021 23:14 #666
by Wavehead
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I have been following this intriguing story since the beginning, I’m pleased to say I find how you weave the interaction between characters fascinating I now have an expansive sense how the different characters look, act and most of all how they think
Waiting for the next chapter eagerly
Waiting for the next chapter eagerly
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20 Nov 2021 00:12 #833
by Erisian
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Final part of the book is now up.
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14 Dec 2021 10:58 #976
by Wavehead
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I’m really hoping you have more chapters of this great story in development
Please
Please
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15 Dec 2021 05:59 - 15 Dec 2021 06:38 #990
by Angeldude
Replied by Angeldude on topic Light And Shadow Discussion
For some reason, I hadn't read book 3 when I saw this, so I figured I'd catch up. Now I'm not sure what to do for the next week beyond listen to Smash Bros music on loop.
Some brief thoughts on Call of the Light: hacker witch Ms. Lain (I see what you did there) is awesome and mildly terrifying despite being a normal human mutant, and Jordan unironically saying "Be not afraid" after just reforming her human body was amazing, along with introducing herself as Amariel before correcting herself.
With that out of the way, Jordan's adventures in hell had so much that I noticed that hadn't quite come together until the very end with spectacular brilliance. Pun very intended.
I eagerly await the continuation and seeing her classmates' reactions when she shows up having tripled her wing count, among other things. Thank you, Erisian, for this incredible story!
Some brief thoughts on Call of the Light: hacker witch Ms. Lain (I see what you did there) is awesome and mildly terrifying despite being a normal human mutant, and Jordan unironically saying "Be not afraid" after just reforming her human body was amazing, along with introducing herself as Amariel before correcting herself.
With that out of the way, Jordan's adventures in hell had so much that I noticed that hadn't quite come together until the very end with spectacular brilliance. Pun very intended.
Warning: Spoiler!
I got nervous just about every time she felt that irritation from her broken wing and just brushed it off as something to handle later. It actually took me a while to realize that she never pulled out her wings once after waking up on the beech. Something felt very wrong when arriving in the other realm and she couldn't feel her wings at all. Thinking on her wings for a bit, I'd remembered that she'd been called a seraph on a few occasions, which makes sense given the burning light, except for one small problem: she only had 2 wings. If she truly was a seraph, she would almost certainly get 4 more later on.
The Spark started out as a cool way to have a faux-sun in the demonic world, but alarm bells instantly started going off the moment it was called "Lucifer's Kiss." Light provided by the Lightbringer himself in a world where his daughter felt disconnected from the Light. I knew It had to be important in some way, but I thought it would be something like be healed by its gaze, or more epically diving in entirely. I did not catch that the sphere she was dreaming of being trapped in was the Spark itself until the very end. Amariel herself was the Spark itself the entire time! Her already being so well adapted the first time we see her was confusing since how could she go that long with nothing happening? Because she sealed her own power within the Spark to seek stability from all the chaos on Earth.
All that and the other details leading up to that awesome (in both senses of the word) finale was incredible.
On a more minor note, bravo for using hereditary epilepsy as foreshadowing. I had to go all the way back to Into the Light to see that Jenna had experienced seizures, and that her brother had incinerated himself with his own powers. After seeing what he does here, the burnout seems like it was also caused by a seizure that got amplified by his speed, rather than actual fire manipulation.
The Spark started out as a cool way to have a faux-sun in the demonic world, but alarm bells instantly started going off the moment it was called "Lucifer's Kiss." Light provided by the Lightbringer himself in a world where his daughter felt disconnected from the Light. I knew It had to be important in some way, but I thought it would be something like be healed by its gaze, or more epically diving in entirely. I did not catch that the sphere she was dreaming of being trapped in was the Spark itself until the very end. Amariel herself was the Spark itself the entire time! Her already being so well adapted the first time we see her was confusing since how could she go that long with nothing happening? Because she sealed her own power within the Spark to seek stability from all the chaos on Earth.
All that and the other details leading up to that awesome (in both senses of the word) finale was incredible.
On a more minor note, bravo for using hereditary epilepsy as foreshadowing. I had to go all the way back to Into the Light to see that Jenna had experienced seizures, and that her brother had incinerated himself with his own powers. After seeing what he does here, the burnout seems like it was also caused by a seizure that got amplified by his speed, rather than actual fire manipulation.
I eagerly await the continuation and seeing her classmates' reactions when she shows up having tripled her wing count, among other things. Thank you, Erisian, for this incredible story!
Last edit: 15 Dec 2021 06:38 by Angeldude. Reason: attempted link; mixing up book titles
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19 Dec 2021 23:15 - 19 Dec 2021 23:18 #1009
by Erisian
Replied by Erisian on topic Light And Shadow Discussion
Glad some folks have like it.
After finishing Light And Shadow, a kind reader helped out and sent me proofreading corrections for the entire saga to go along with my own re-reading of it all in prep for working on book five. Those corrections (of some cringe-worthy homophone abuses, typos, and just general 'how the heck did I miss this??' mistakes) are now posted. There's still stuff uncaught I'm sure, but a lot did get cleaned up.
So if anyone hasn't read these and is interested, it all started in 'Into The Light' which is available here in the WhatIF category. I tried posting a direct link, but it was removed (maybe because I haven't posted on the new forums enough).
Work on Book Five (tentatively titled 'The Light Between') is presently dancing about in the ol' noggin, and yes Khan-kitty should have much more scene-time in this one.
After finishing Light And Shadow, a kind reader helped out and sent me proofreading corrections for the entire saga to go along with my own re-reading of it all in prep for working on book five. Those corrections (of some cringe-worthy homophone abuses, typos, and just general 'how the heck did I miss this??' mistakes) are now posted. There's still stuff uncaught I'm sure, but a lot did get cleaned up.
So if anyone hasn't read these and is interested, it all started in 'Into The Light' which is available here in the WhatIF category. I tried posting a direct link, but it was removed (maybe because I haven't posted on the new forums enough).
Work on Book Five (tentatively titled 'The Light Between') is presently dancing about in the ol' noggin, and yes Khan-kitty should have much more scene-time in this one.
Last edit: 19 Dec 2021 23:18 by Erisian. Reason: Some text got lost too.
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