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Last Orders (Part 1) by Astrodragon

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07 Jan 2025 01:00 #3969 by DanZilla
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07 Jan 2025 04:55 #3971 by Dreamer
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07 Jan 2025 05:22 #3972 by mhalpern
They REALLY didn't do their research on the area, pretty sure at this point, heavy RF interference probably triggers a high alert protocol in Dunwich and probably a land line to Whateley and ARC. people have tried that shit enough times, I give them 15 min tops before they get "interrupted" and that's before factoring in the "Edna Mode" of the Whateley universe,

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable
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07 Jan 2025 06:29 #3973 by null0trooper

Fairyfire and Belfry are there, where is everyone else who was supposed to audition? Belfry sure has the look down for a very unusual MC.

Modelled after Cirque du Soleil clowns/jugglers/sleight of hand artists.

"I've got a couple of video editing credits, some development work for entertainment VR. Contact juggling and sleight of hand count as 'variety'. I still haven't forgiven Max for insisting I get credited for that one scene even after the footage hit the floor."


Too bad Morgana and Thulia weren't around when Benjamin showed Becky his union cards.

What is Belfry doing over at M3's table? Hikaru chuckles, of course, she knows Belfry through her own AI.

Hikaru has actually posed with Benjamin for pictures (which both of them hated), at Narita Airport. She'd recognize the New Year tradition, of course. Confounding that would be how long ago Benjamin's Chinese teacher (Naomi) learned her letters.

*Daikokunyo be a Lady...*


Daikokunyo is the feminine version of Daikokuten

"Daikokuten is one of the Seven Lucky Gods in Japanese mythology who bring prosperity and fortune to people throughout Japan. As the god of luck and fortune-seeking, he is an important household deity also known as the god of five cereals. Those bold enough to make their own fortunes receive Daikokuten’s blessings."

... Luck Be A Lady tonight! :)


"I lost some things when my dorm room exploded. Then time sort of got away from me."

Besides, this is Benjamin, since when has he cared about tradition as much as giving a gift.

He cares about Kapalangpur traditions. The Ghost Festival, Qingming Festival, and Double Ninth Festival are closer to his own interests.

"No Heroes" Part 6: Something to chew on link .

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07 Jan 2025 07:47 #3974 by Mister D
Their plans would have been reasonable for anywhere else, but Dunwich... :facepalm:

Considering the events in Dunwich that took place in the Jade stories, the locals won't really be bothered, apart from an "Is this going to make me late?" reaction. :D

Evac'ing through a were-infested forest will be brief, tragic, and, funny...

When you consider the Whateley approach of aiming for the will, rather than the hand or the knife, I don't give good odds on the long-term survival chances for the Order.

And that's not including the reactions of Thulia's relatives... :rofl:
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07 Jan 2025 08:42 #3975 by Astrodragon
You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.
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07 Jan 2025 12:45 #3976 by mhalpern

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable

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07 Jan 2025 12:47 #3977 by Astrodragon

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

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07 Jan 2025 12:58 #3978 by mhalpern

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable

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07 Jan 2025 13:01 #3979 by Astrodragon

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

What makes you think shes going to wake up??

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07 Jan 2025 13:47 #3980 by mhalpern

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

What makes you think shes going to wake up??

because the only benefit to protagonist syndrome is that it usually comes with plot armor. and such an unexpected meeting could make a teen almost wish they didn't have said plot armor

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable

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07 Jan 2025 13:49 #3981 by Dan Formerly Domoviye

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

What makes you think shes going to wake up??

because the only benefit to protagonist syndrome is that it usually comes with plot armor. and such an unexpected meeting could make a teen almost wish they didn't have said plot armor

Most of my MC's usually end up begging for the sweet release of death.

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07 Jan 2025 14:40 #3982 by mhalpern

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

What makes you think shes going to wake up??

because the only benefit to protagonist syndrome is that it usually comes with plot armor. and such an unexpected meeting could make a teen almost wish they didn't have said plot armor

Most of my MC's usually end up begging for the sweet release of death.

And an unexpected meet the parents is no where near Petra level.

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable

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07 Jan 2025 16:06 #3983 by mhalpern

Their plans would have been reasonable for anywhere else, but Dunwich... :facepalm:

Considering the events in Dunwich that took place in the Jade stories, the locals won't really be bothered, apart from an "Is this going to make me late?" reaction. :D

Evac'ing through a were-infested forest will be brief, tragic, and, funny...

When you consider the Whateley approach of aiming for the will, rather than the hand or the knife, I don't give good odds on the long-term survival chances for the Order.

And that's not including the reactions of Thulia's relatives... :rofl:

the cult wont survive, If it wasn't for Thulia, some cells might have been left, simply because the entire op was off the books for them and they ordered this cell to stand down, but because they're messing with the affairs of dragons, there will be ketchup....

Micro scenes and bad ideas are freely adoptable
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07 Jan 2025 18:13 #3984 by Astrodragon

You'll see the reaction of Thulias father and the Order of the Flame later on.

he'll take the opportunity to meet Morgana?


maybe. she mit not be consious

All the better to get unprepared reactions when she wakes up,

What makes you think shes going to wake up??

because the only benefit to protagonist syndrome is that it usually comes with plot armor. and such an unexpected meeting could make a teen almost wish they didn't have said plot armor

Aww, you think I wont kill a protagonist due to plot armour?
you guys are so cute and adorable..

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